| This is something I wrote a while ago that I recently reread and remembered how much I liked it. It's another Owen section. I would love to really get going on his novel, but I really want to make more progress on the other two before I do. Let me know what y'all think. PLEASE. If you've read any of the Ripley Performing Live stuff, you'll recognize a couple folks here. Owen felt the natural rhythm of his feet crunching fallen leaves as he walked down the trail near his cabin. He was getting worried as he considered this songwriting retreat he had assigned for himself. He looked up at the canopy of brilliant October color and cursed at himself. Even surrounded by intense beauty up here on the mountain, he still couldn’t write a decent damned song. He was exhausted by this bout of songwriting bulimia. Every result of his writing binge had to be purged for the sake of his self-respect. Owen’s dreary thoughts were pierced by a chorus of laughter. He looked up from his boots to see a young man and woman up ahead of him, a few feet off the trail. They were both looking up at something in the tree they stood beneath. “You’re on crack, Honey,” the woman drawled through a smile. “I don’t see anything at all.” “I swear I saw it,” the man replied. “Look closely.” His curious nature forced Owen to investigate. He stopped at the base of the tree, a comfortable distance away from the couple; undetected despite the crunch of leaves. As he joined them in staring intently through the uppermost branches of the stately, ancient oak tree, he momentarily lost his curiosity to the magnificence of the tree itself. For that moment, he was breathless. The tree was in its height of color. Oranges, reds, and yellows seemed to set the beautiful thing afire with a secret passion of its own. Owen felt a strange camaraderie with this old man of the East Tennessee mountains. It blazed almost obscenely to show its love for the world, much like Owen did. But then his passion wasn’t so secret. Not anymore. Owen’s thoughts were interrupted (thankfully) by the other man’s voice, telling his wife, “There, Precious. You see it?” Owen still didn’t know what they were supposed to be seeing. Maybe they were just admiring the old man’s Fall wardrobe. He turned his head to watch the couple. The man, a tall mulatto with dreadlocks, was an oddity in himself. His trendy hairstyle belied a down-home essence created by his shabby plaid flannel shirt, old ragged jeans, well-worn Doc Martins, and a general air of country boy comfort. He pulled the beautiful young woman’s back into his chest and took here hand in his as he pointed to the mysterious something in the high, heavy boughs. Owen watched the young woman as she squinted, widened her eyes, then closed one as if to aim a rifle. She was obviously a forest goddess: A petite young white woman with a mass of coiled dark auburn hair. Owen might have found the couple odd-looking, but he was surprised at how at home they looked together. He couldn’t suppress a smile as they laughed and teased each other like a couple of happy teenagers. Finally, the woman exclaimed, “Oh my God, Terrance! I see it! How did he get out here, though? I didn’t think they lived here – only out West.” The man named Terrance answered, “I don’t know, Precious. I hear they’ve been releasing them in different places to attempt to boost the population. Maybe this is one of them.” Owen’s curiosity in the mysterious being up in the tree returned. He shielded his eyes from the sinking sun’s glare with his hand, but ended up tipping his sunglasses over his forehead. Finally, he saw the object of the couple’s wonder. A huge male bald eagle, sitting on the old man’s blazing broad shoulder, surveying the mountain ridge as if he owned it. He probably did. The thought made Owen chuckle. He saw both halves of the adventurous couple start out of the corner of his eye. He drew his sunglasses back over his eyes and regarded the couple warmly. “Sorry,” he said with his most disarming grin. “Didn’t mean to scare y’all. I was curious what y’all were look at. Cool huh? Way over here? Way away from where he belongs.” “I don’t know,” the man mused, talking to Owen as if they were old friends. “What do you think, Precious?” The woman smiled affectionately at her husband before she leveled deep green eyes to Owen’s gray ones. She grinned and shrugged, then looked back up at the eagle. “Maybe he belonged here all along.” “Interesting thought,” Owen replied. He shook his head to relieve the ache he felt at the intangible exchange of affection between husband and wife as he watched them. He wondered why this couple was so fascinating to him. Why did he feel so connected with the oak tree and his buddy the eagle? It’s a tree for Christ’s sake! What had this scene stirred in his blood that was now screaming? He shook his head again to straighten out his wayward thoughts and smiled at the couple again. He extended his hand. “Owen Darcy.” “Terrance Washington,” the mulatto replied, a look of surprise and respect crossing his golden eyes at the mention of Owen’s name. He shook Owen’s hand and continued, “This is my wife, Elise.” He looked to his stunned wife, then back at Owen. “I thought you looked familiar.” “We love your music,” Elise cut in, regaining her countenance. She smiled as she shook Owen’s hand. With something that could only be called country girl grace, she continued, “I always figured you for a mountain man.” | |
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| I've been doing a lot with regard to my writing, but have been too preoccupied with my current job search to post too much about it. I'm sure you're all in uproar. ;^)
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| ...even if you have no idea of who I am. I really need some honest opinions here.
These are two versions of the same chapter-opening paragraph. Upon reading the first one recently, I decided that this is way too narrative - and I'm terrible about opening every single chapter in this same manner. THE MADNESS NEEDS TO STOP. In the second version, I'm trying to show more action and to get more into his head and to see things more from his eyes.
Which works better as a chapter-opener? Which is more interesting? Which makes you want to read further? Which is written better?
Original Version
Coffee was not going to cure Steve's utter exhaustion this morning. He had already drank three quarters of his large cappuccino (with two extra shots or espresso) and he was still completely wiped out. It had been another long night. Creative Loafing had begged him to occasionally review a concert, Dave FM had begged him to do a weekly call-in spot on the morning show, and L5P.com had begged him to contribute a diary of his experience living in Little Five Points. Everyone was begging and Steve was just too generous to turn any of them down. He did enjoy it. But aside from his impossible schedule, a cloud of fear and doubt had formed in his mind since his recent appointment with Dr. Wardlaw. Pharses like "killing yourself by degrees," "slow suicide," and "heart attack" pecked at the back of his mind, telling him what he already knew.
New Version
Steve glanced from the road to the large and hideously caffinated cappuccino in his hand. About three quarters gone already. Useless caffine. Don't do me a lot of good when I only got three hours of sleep last night. He rarely took the time to run down the list of all he'd crammed into any given night, although he always knew it was a lot given the feeling of being flattened that usually followed. But Spring Street was utterly slammed this morning, so he had a little bit of an opportunity to hope to God he hadn't forgotten anything. Finished the blog entry for the Little Five Points website. Went to the Hayes Carll set at Variety Playhouse and got notes for the Creative Loafing review... His thoughts stalled and Dr. Wardlaw's voice slinked into his head. "You're killing yourself by degrees, son." | |
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| I've finished my MT certification at last and I have my evenings free (except for job-hunting), so now I can start REALLY thinking about my writing again. I've started a journal that I'm actually quite proud of. In the past, I've kept diaries or typed up the occasional rant, but this is an actual journal - a journal for a novelist. I'm horrible with diary-type journal entries and I never seem to be able to do anything except complain in them. With this new journal, I've been recording thoughts and ideas and that's all. I've also started pasting pictures in it so maybe I can look back at the entries and come up with something out of it all.
I've also come a tad closer to resuming my work on The Art of Calm. I swear, this one little road block has been driving me nuts. I keep thinking I've gotten somewhere, but I haven't. UGH! SO frustrating. In any case, I've gotten down with the old mind-mapping software and I think I MAY have come up with a solution to my little transition problem. At last (maybe).
And I've decided to work up a new copy of my organizational manuscript for AOC simply because the old one is falling apart and I need to update some parts of it. Should also get me back in the mindset of working on that particular novel.
There's my quick update. Yippee. ;^)
Oh yeah, and I've FINALLY got internet at home. I had forgotten how nice it is. | |
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| Just about every writer in the world would probably include "people watching" on their "favorite passtimes" lists. The reason being, quite simply, that people are really interesting - especially when they think nobody is watching (or when they just don't care if anyone is watching, which is my favorite). You'd be amazed how many characters and ideas you can come up with just by watching people. My friend Misha and I do it anytime we go out together. We can sit and muse while we're eating and talking. We exchanged amused looks with our eyes, just aching for the moment when the folks in question leave and we can start comparing speculations. "I think it was a first date, but they knew each other from some other time." "I think they're both in a wedding and the girl is the bridesmaid and the guy is the groom and the bridesmaid is trying to seduce the groom to get back at the bride for some petty something or other." Three guesses as to whose guess was whose. With all this in mind, I decided to take my camera with me to the Taste of Calhoun festival this past weekend. I'm on the board of a non-profit organization charged with awareness and stewardship of our local river here, and we set up a booth at our tiny little local String Band and food festival to raise some awareness. Luckily, we got a great spot again this year, right next to the stage. In between trying to give the spiel about the river and giving posters and coloring books to kids, I managed to get a few snapshots of the various people I know or am related to who were playing in the bands. But the best pictures I got were of the crowd and assorted odd people who just caught my eye. This guy is my favorite. I LOVE this guy. I saw him at the Kroger once before wearing a Woodstock jacket (a jean jacket that HAD to be from the original Woodstock), and you can imagine my glee when I saw him wandering around at the festival. This is one of those awesome people who just doesn't give a damn what people think of him, so of course he was basically alone every time I saw him. I would have loved to talk to him, but I'm entirely too shy to start conversations with strangers. So I just enjoyed watching him. He danced to the music, smiling from ear to ear pretty much the whole time and taking it all in. I just LOVE this guy (in the purple shirt and brown hat).  Another one I like a lot. If you can't read it (I still need to do some photoshopping on these), the sticker on the banjo case says "Darwin loves you." A wonderfully contraversial statement for our little town full of staunch Southern Baptists.  I took a lot more. These were just my favorites. Anyway, the point of the whole thing was to find some story seeds or a character somewhere. I've started my writing journal, and I'm going to paste some of these in it. You never know when something will spark a brilliant idea. :^) | |
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| I think I've figured out why I don't like half of the stuff I've written. I'm kind of a careless writer when I'm just getting an idea down on paper. I leave out a lot of important stuff and I don't describe things as well as I should. Also, my syntax and mechanics need some improvement. I need to experiment more with sentence structure and word choice. I'm afraid all my writing is too flat. Of course all of this means that it will now take me FOREVER to get anything accomplished. But I suppose once I get my skills better honed and dust off some filed information from my advanced grammar and composition classes, I'll speed up.
I've got a couple of really good ideas. One for stories and one for articles. I don't want to divulge too much about either yet because I still don't know exactly what I want to do. But both these ideas will lead to a lot practice and a lot of fun formatty stuff. I think I may even take a web design course or two once I finish my MT certification. Can't hurt.
I was bad on vacation and didn't write any. Partly because I didn't have a writing space I liked and partly because everything else was so distracting and fun. Oh well. I may get a funny story about chlorine burn out of it, though. | |
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| Corey and I are heading out next weekend for a nice long retreat away from the various millions of things that continually harry our existence. We intend to hike, steep in the hot tub, read, and write for four solid days. Hell yes! It's hard to decide what books and writing to bring along. It's several days, but it's not a whole week, so you don't want to overload yourself. I ended up putting together a 3-inch binder with bits and pieces of things I want to work on. It's proven very useful already. It goes along with my whole "everything in one place" neurosis. In any case, the main thing I've been trying to accomplish lately is to finish the Ripley Performing Live organizational manuscript. I realized that I had been trying too hard on previous outlines for this novel, and that's probably why I never seemed to finish one. I ended up making up a very loose, very flexible, and very general outline to work from. When I start to give it more structure and have more ideas worked in, I'll probably expand it and give it more detail, but for the time being, this extremely loose outline is doing the job for me. I also got started on the next part of The Art of Calm FINALLY. I haven't gotten farther than two paragraphs, but I don't hate either paragraph, and it's left all kinds of room for me to keep going. YAAAAAYYYY!!! Steve hasn't abandoned me after all. When I have more, I'll post some and see what y'all think. | |
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| We all have our habits - not necessarily habits like what you eat every day or your daily routine, but your listening, watching, and writing habits. I definitely have mine. By nature, I'm a creature who likes stability, and change makes me nervous. I like my habits and I like my comfort zones. But, I have a large enough sense of adventure to get a thrill out of change and a thrill out of temporaily breaking what I'll call culture habits. You will never wrentch my copy of Cold Roses by Ryan Adams out of my sweaty little palms, and you'll never convince me to stop reading Jane Austen and Charlotte Bronte novels. I'll also never abandon my characters. Still sometimes, you just gotta get away. I think this all started when Corey and I were at a used book store in Chattanooga. They had a little pile of "Penguin 60s" which were little bitty copies of classics put out by Penguin Press. They cost fifty cents a piece, so I grabbed a few. I made sure to pick up things I wasn't really familiar with like George Eliot and Flaubert. I also got one of Rimbaud's poetry, which I am somewhat familiar with, but not as much as I'd like. I liked getting something totally different, so it continued. I went on Barnes and Noble .com with a view to ordering Villette by Charlotte Bronte. I like the Barnes and Noble classics because they have great footnotes and endnotes, so I browsed for a minute. I saw Thus Spoke Zarathustra, which is something totally left of center for me. But I figured, "Hey, I've heard of this Nietzsche feller, and sounds like he might know what he's talking about," so I ordered it. Then I got my copy of Saturnalia by The Gutter Twins, which is marvelous. It features one of my favorites (Greg Dulli) along with Mark Lanegan of the Screaming Trees. It's different. Sinister, beautiful, amazing. Lanegan's voice is incredible. But his work away from Greg Dulli is outside my comfort zone, even though I own one of the Queens of The Stone Age Albums he's on. I took it out and listened to it for the first time in years - and I loved it. Outside the comfort zone again. And today, I've been web surfing like I usually do on days when I have little to nothing to do at work. I went to one of my daily sites, which is basically >Ryan Adams' stream of consciousness blog. It's a bit odd, and it's scared some Ryan Adams fans because they fear it may be a sign that our Wonder Boy has finally cracked. Others of us, however, think it's clear that it's just a sounding board for himself when he's got nothing to do and it's fun to get a glimpse inside the head of such a mad genius. In any case, he likes to post videos. I watched >yesterday's video, and all it is Ryan doing a little talking and walking down the street on a Sunday in New York City. I loved it. I was so jealous that he could just walk down the street and be surrounded by stuff and people and odd shops and be exposed to so much inspiration at once. This got me to thinking. I've never lived more than 30 miles from my hometown. Needless to say, I've felt a little...stagnant for well...years really. I wonder how Corey, my writing, and I might benefit from six months in New York - or even a year in Atlanta. Even my fear of city traffic and scary public transportation have given way to this thought. Granted, we have considered moving to Chattanooga, but it's not nearly as diverse as Atlanta. Corey and I are going out of town for several days in April and we both intend to do some writing while we're there, but it's a cabin in the woods, which is WAAAAAYYYYY inside my comfort zone. I feel a need for something OUTSIDE what I tend to surround myself with. I'm not making plans to move already and I have no intention of actually living and staying in a bigger city than Chattanooga (country girl to core, folks), but it might be a nice breath of fresh air. Sometimes you just gotta shake the dust off and see what happens. I doubt any of this will come to fruition, but the next time Corey feels an itch to visit Atlanta, I'll be all for it and I might even suggest a longer stay. | |
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| I figured since this is a blog about writing novels, I should start posting some more actual segments of novels.
This one is as yet untitled and undeveloped, but I think I'm really going to like this character. This is the working beginning of the novel. I haven't written much of it at all, but I really like how this part turned out.
If you read this, PLEASE COMMENT ON IT because all writers need feedback - negative or positive. Critiques are ALWAYS welcome. And I promise, I won't hate you if you tell me you don't like it. I might huff for a minute and question your sanity, but after a quick reread, I'll probably agree with you and I'll certainly be thankful.
The old place still looked the same, if not a little neglected. Owen had bought it five years ago to celebrate his debut album going platinum - and to celebrate expendable income. All of his friends and “people” thought he was nuts to keep it. He was hardly ever here. But this was one of those times when he needed it more than he could ever explain to his “people.”
The very concept of “people” seemed so distant up here in the wild Smokies. Owen was thankful for it. His people had become more like a mob begging to be warmed in his celebrity’s light. One thing no one could understand - barely even himself - was that he absolutely could not forget his roots. As much as he tried to play the part of brilliant balladeer and badass rocker, he still felt backwoods among all the glittery hoopla of being the focus of the public’s eye.
Owen dropped his bags where he stood in the middle of the small living room. It was obvious that the cleaning service he had hired to give the place a good spit and shine before his arrival had come and gone - and had actually done an amazing job. Everything was as he left it over a year ago when he came with Shayla. He had been afraid the sight of the hearth rug would bring back the pain of beautiful memories that could only be memories from now on. But it was as if she’d never existed. He’d written his way out of the funk, screamed his pain in a digital riot, toured with it, and grown tired of it. Well. At least he’d gotten his third album out of it. A good one, if he did say so himself.
Owen inhaled the old familiar scent of aged lumber and collapsed on the large corduroy couch. He smiled to himself in the promise of a good solid two months of enjoying the cabin he secretly regarded as his home. He loved the place. Wood, real fabric, stone, a porch. His apartment in Nashville was nice, and he enjoyed it. But it just didn’t feel right for some reason. It seemed to be fabricated instead of built. Not sterile or false, but…sugar-coated. Those country roots showing again. But the critics (the friendly ones anyway) always said that was part of what made his music so good. Well, it used to anyway.
Owen sighed at the thoughts now entering his head. Writer’s block. A dam holding up the river of his genius. Blah Blah. That was why he was here, wasn’t it? To remember the bard within. Wasn’t that the bullshit line he’d fed his management? Seemed to work because it was partly true. The other part wasn’t quite as clear even to Owen. But again, he was here to figure all that out. In the meantime, didn’t he leave an unopened bottle of Jack Daniels in the kitchen last year?
Owen peeled himself off the couch and ambled into the small, but fully-equipped kitchen. Shit. Owen mused. I might actually be able to cook a real meal while I’m here. Another residual effect of a mountain upbringing: the desire for a good home-cooked meal. How long had it been? Owen decided not to even consider that, and instead started making a mental list of the things he’d get at the grocery store in town. First things first, though.
Owen took his bottle of Jack out onto the back porch. He smiled at the very sight of his beloved hot tub. Just big enough for two, built-in fridge, built-in stereo. Hallelujah for the science of luxury. He set his whiskey down on the porch floor and struggled for a few minutes to remove the hot tub’s cover. He smiled. The cleaning service had not forgotten his request to get the hot tub ready. God bless ‘em. Fame and money sometimes had their perks. Owen started to head back into the house to fetch his CD wallet, but decided he needed to reacquaint himself with the music of the woods. So he turned the jets on, stripped down to nothing, grabbed his whiskey, and hopped into the steaming, bubbling water. “Oh fuck yeah,” he moaned.
He settled into one of the molded fiberglass lounges, lay his head back and looked up at the sky. He had forgotten how a sky full of stars fringed by trees could make him feel all that he was. Perspective became a study and the world reminded him that he was on it. Owen sighed as he opened his ears to the sound of crickets, cicadas, and the occasional night bird. The breeze dragged its delicate honeysuckle fingers over his scruffy face and through his wild black curls. He practically shuddered with the tenable glory of the sensation. Oh God, why can’t I stay here longer? It never seemed to be long enough. He always got used to something just in time for it to change. Stop it. Just be, y’ moron.
Owen spent nearly an hour watching the brilliant, big sliver of moon shrink, climb the sky, and change color from orange to yellow to milky white. He was just beginning to doze off when he swore he heard the faintest hint of a guitar playing over the ridge. Something bittersweet and beautiful. He decided that the half bottle of whiskey he had killed was sending him back on tour. Fearful of drowning with the memory of the tour rushing through his veins, he dragged himself out of the hot tub bound for his bed. | |
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| I mentioned the free EDraw Mind Mapping software in my last post, and I just felt the need to reiterate what a brilliant idea this mind mapping software is since I just accomplished a great feat of creative decision-making. For years - and I mean years - I have had a very difficult time deciding what to do with a particular section of Ripley Performing Live. It was a similar situation to that of the axed section of The Art of Calm. I wrote it and I liked it. But something always seemed off about it. I decided that the whole thing just seemed to be too deux ex machina for me in some ways. But I love the section and it is kind of important to the story in a lot of ways. I had let it simmer for a very long time until I started working on the the organizational manuscript lately. I've been tackling the manuscript for RPL in a very systematic way because there's just SO MUCH stuff, and I had been taking the sections I don't hate one at a time and making notes. Well, I got to the section in question, and I was just stumped. I didn't even know if it was going to stay, so I haven't taken any notes for it. So I decided what better time to take this mind mapping stuff on a real test drive. Here's the result. I actually came up with a very good (and fairly simple) solution to this years-old problem.  Really, y'all, this is good stuff. I'm really glad I stumbled upon this. I think every writer should have something similar. Happy mapping. | |
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